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Argh! I cannot *believe* some "writers".



I've been reading some Buffy fan fic that is sort of linked to the "Naked in school" universe.

The author's spelling and grammar weren't too bad. I've managed to enjoy *far* worse.

I started to get a bit bugged when he specified a group of 10 people involved in "the Program". I could understand not naming all of them. But then he had someone in public refer to three of them by name during an introduction and then not name the others (trust me, the way he did it was such that this just *didn't* work).

And there were other things. But what led to this rant was when he has one girl ask another is she can give her a *blow job*. No, I'm not kidding.

And only a couple paragraphs later he has another pair of girls going at it and refers to one as *fellating* the other!!!!

Look, if you are gonna write porn, especially porn involving a gender or orientation other than your own, do a bit of reading and research so you don't make a fool of yourself and insult your readers' intelligence.

Another thing, so far I have yet to see any evidence that the writer knows anything about female genitalia either. Well, he seems to know that there's a hole down there.

Date: 2005-04-23 03:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] iamjw.livejournal.com
[livejournal.com profile] oh_johnny_

Alternatively, if you want to see the whole community and watch 16 year old girls marvel at my l33t writing skillz: [livejournal.com profile] beatlesslash

It's not exactly hardcore, but any feedback you care to offer would be welcome.

Date: 2005-04-23 08:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] iamjw.livejournal.com
Ummm, I'm almost afraid to ask this, but why "guys their age" particularly (bearing in mind that they're in their early 20's as this is set)as opposed to men generally?

Date: 2005-04-23 10:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] iamjw.livejournal.com
Ah. Okay.
(and you know you're dying to tell me the story , so just go ahead :-))

Date: 2005-04-25 12:43 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] iamjw.livejournal.com
Y'know, either I've heard this before or you are not the only person to have experienced this. Seems all my time spent actually *swinging* on the swing set could have been better spent :-)

Date: 2005-04-23 08:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] iamjw.livejournal.com
Pineapple juice, huh? I'll bear that in mind.

I know about the prostate, just haven't quite figured out how much detail I really want to go into - or how to do it without being boring, especially as I'm writing this more to be titillating than as something to jerk off to.

Date: 2005-04-23 11:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] iamjw.livejournal.com
Though it can also make you think you need too pee rather badly if "too" stimulated.

Rather like clitoral stimulation, then.

And I have a pretty good idan of the difficulties involved in oral sex having some experience of the matter myself :-)

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